Subway at Lunch Time

[JfuckinC]

Originally posted by Sugarphreak


Shhhhhhhh!!!

lol get real, you go at 11:30..

[Masked Bandit]

Haters gonna hate...

I like the story.

Extra pickles please.

[bulaian]

Originally posted by JfuckinC


lol get real, you go at 11:30..

Shhhh! That's my time!

[max_boost]

lol well written or copied, good read though. I dislike subway.

[-relk-]

Im in the group that liked both.

I say keep it up!

[Spoons]

100% created from my imagination. No copy and paste/took someone else's story and altered it.

This started out as just a simple little status on my Facebook. I have quite a few of them (honestly I just use Facebook mainly to post stupid shit to make people laugh). Anyway this story is loosely based on true events (people do actually speed walk to Subway).

My friends suggested I write a book. It's been done before, yes, and this is just one of the stories in it (it will be a compilation of short stories, all based loosely on my life). It may just turn into a passion project, but that is exactly what writing is for me, a passion. I wouldn't really expect much to come of it. But in that case, definitely not going to try and plaguer someone else's work. People who know me personally would completely read that in my tone and know it really came from me.

But I wanted to try it out with Beyond. Everyone is going to have haters, but I'm glad most enjoyed it.

[acura_el]

Good read! I don't know why, but I was half expecting it to end with the Fresh Prince of Bel-Air song.

[nj2Type-S]

i thought it was funny. got an awesome visual while reading the story lol!

[CMW403]

The quality of your writing isn't there, but Comedian Jim Norton has written two books filled with short stories just like this and they are HILARIOUS.

Seriously, if you have enough material and you are motivated, I say write a damn book!

[superboss]

Worst thread ever.. Really, you come on to Beyond and complain about the fuckin line at Subway. Fuck sakes!!!

[Paul]

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[SKR]

Originally posted by CMW403
The quality of your writing isn't there, but Comedian Jim Norton has written two books filled with short stories just like this and they are HILARIOUS.

His books are funny because he understands comedy. This writing is by someone who doesn't understand comedy.

[Spoons]

Originally posted by CMW403
The quality of your writing isn't there, but Comedian Jim Norton has written two books filled with short stories just like this and they are HILARIOUS.

Seriously, if you have enough material and you are motivated, I say write a damn book!

Keep in mind both parts were written just off the top of my head. Not much thought was put into it.

I have a note pad I keep of better ones that I've put more work in. I'll share at some point.

[Sugarphreak]

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[jonnycat]

I really liked part one, it was a great lead up to what seemed like it could have a really funny ending. I kept envisioning a funny commercial, or a sitcom sequence.

[AA2001]

cool story bro! Gave me a pre-lunch laugh. Time to go!